My students are still into the slicing. Most stories are about P.E. adventures and mishaps; the others are about teachers they don't like and the examples of what happened that day to confirm why. Nevertheless, they are writing and posting and enjoying doing it!Post from a student:
Shut up and Let Me Drive
As I stood up from tying my shoe I took a deep breath in. I let it out. I enjoyed the moment of peace, the calm before the storm. I was ready. "Go!" yelled the coach, we all rushed forward. I felt myself being pushed forward by the surge of bodies. I saw the people in front of me, I heard the foot falls of those behind me. I kept on running. We thinned out, the sprinters in front, the walkers behind. I found myself towards the front, I kept a steady, maintainable jog. I passed the hares, those who found their sprint to be too difficult to keep up. I finished my first lap. As I began my second, I vaguely heard Coach yell out my time, I was blocking everything from my mind. I counted slowly, to keep my breathing even and to distract myself from everything else, "And.. one, and.. two, and... three, and... four." I overlapped the tortoises, those who thought they could finish by walking, "twenty-one, twenty-two, twenty-three, twenty-four." I finished my second lap. I was beginning to feel the effects of my jog, my side burned, my breath was short, and every muscle in my body burned. I ignored it, "seventy-one, seventy-two, seventy-three, seventy-four." "You've got to take a break," said one part of my mind. "Shut up and let me drive," said the other. I continued running. My third lap passed just like the other two. "Ninety-one, ninety-two, ninety-three, ninety-four," I overlapped the slowpokes, "ninety-five ninety-six, ninety-seven, ninety eight." I could see the finish line, I broke into a sprint, as fast as my worn-out body would allow me. The world turned to a blur. I crossed the finish line and stopped, but I didn't sit down, I stood tall and proud of my feat of endurance. I had never once broken stride, I never once stopped, and I had come in fifth place.


2 comments:
What a great writer that student is! I felt like I was right there, running next to him!
What a lovely and descriptive slice from your student! The student captured the thoughts and feelings quite nicely. Bravo!
-Carrie F.
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